I was on a lilly pad I felt like flying in the sky. The sky is dark and when I was in the sky I saw a person drinking a cup of water and the detective looked at the lilly pad it was wet it was slimey the frog went a way. To a home to watch TV and chickens were flying too.
This a a draft piece of writing. Mrs Natusch has only checked my spelling.
What did I do well? What do I need to work on?
This a a draft piece of writing. Mrs Natusch has only checked my spelling.
What did I do well? What do I need to work on?
Hi Kasiti
ReplyDeleteI like the way you began your writing by telling us you were sitting on a lily and and what it felt like.
Can you add some adjectives (describing words) for me? What did the sky look like? What was the lily pad like?
Mrs Natusch
To mrs Natusch
DeleteI have checked my writing.
my Goal is to check my spelling.